南乡子·兴义
（中华新韵）
天宜居士
郁郁葱葱。
似城似景亦朦胧。
三角梅开春色抹。
红火。
润肺润心宜健硕。
注释：三角梅，兴义市市花。
（作者简介:天宜居士，本名夏金峣，贵州人，欧洲大学工商管理博士。北京大学未名湖文学社签约作家。）
点评：
这首《南乡子·兴义》是一首以城市风貌为吟咏对象的今人小令。全词以新韵写就，短小凝练，紧扣兴义“世界春城”“康养之都”的特质，由景入情，由外及内，徐徐展开一幅城景交融、身心俱养的画卷。现逐句解析并综合鉴赏。
逐句解析
“郁郁葱葱。”
起句仅四字，不写具体物象，先铺色彩与气象。四字叠韵，音调绵长，写出兴义满目苍翠、植被繁茂的整体印象。这不单是视觉描写，更暗示气候温润、生机盎然。
“似城似景亦朦胧。”
此句点出核心特质：城与景的边界消融。“似城似景”是客观判断，城中藏景，景中蕴城；“亦朦胧”则让此景笼罩一层氤氲诗意——可能是晨雾，可能是花影，也可能是身处其中那份如梦似幻的感受。七字之间，理性与感性交织。
“三角梅开春色抹。”
笔触由整体转入具体。三角梅为兴义市市花，此句以市花代言整个春天。“抹”字极妙，仿佛春色不是生长而来，而是被造化随手涂抹上去，有一种酣畅淋漓、不假节制的蓬勃之势，暗合花开的繁盛恣意。
“红火。”
二字短句，在全词节奏上是一记明亮的断奏。既是承上写三角梅之色——赤红如火；也是启下转入人事——暗喻生活热烈、日子兴旺。以一字写双重意蕴，简劲有力。
“润肺润心宜健硕。”
收束由景及人，由观赏转向体验。“润肺”是自然馈赠：空气清新，气候温润，呼吸之间即养生。“润心”是精神陶冶：美景怡情，身心俱泰。“健硕”不单指体魄强健，更是一种生命力的饱满昂扬。全词最终落在“人”的体验上，点明康养主旨。
综合鉴赏
此词虽短，却具备完整的审美结构，可从三个维度深入把握。
其一，视觉与感受的双重递进。
全词空间由远及近、由外入内，终至于身心。起笔是全景式的大块青绿（“郁郁葱葱”），继而拉近到城景交融的中景（“似城似景”），再聚焦于一花独艳的特写（“三角梅”），最后内化为身体的呼吸与心灵的触动（“润肺润心”）。这条路径，完成了从“我看此城”到“我在此城”再到“此城入我”的融合。
其二，节制用墨与精准炼字。
《南乡子》本是小令，最忌铺排过甚。此词全用白描，无一典，无赘语，却用“抹”“火”两字让画面瞬间活起来。“抹”有写意的潇洒，“火”具双关的张力。在极短篇幅内形成“绿——红——健”的色彩与情感跃动，收放自如。
其三，城市意象的文学化提炼。
当代城市书写容易滑向口号化、名片化。此词高明之处，在于牢牢抓住三角梅这一具体的、有生命的意象作为核心中介，而非罗列标签。通过三角梅写出春天的浓郁，又以“润肺润心”将对城市的赞美沉淀为切身的生命体验。如此，城市品牌便有了可以触摸的体温。
全词恰如一幅蘸满水分与阳光的写意小品：远山近树是濡染的墨，满城花开是跳荡的色，而最终呼吸之间的那抹甘润，是画外之音，是这座城市留在人身上的印记。
South Countryman Xi Yi
(Chinese New Romance)
A paradise of paradise
It was lush.
Like a city and like a scenery, it is hazy.
The triangle of flowers is growing in spring.
Good luck.
Having a healthy lung and heart is good for health.
Note: The triangle plum is[Author’s Profile]: Tian Youqi, real name Xia Jinyao, from Guizhou Province. He holds a doctorate in Business Administration from a European university. He is a contracted writer with the Baiming Lake Literature Society of Peking University.]
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The song "South Country, Yinyi" is a modern folk song which is devoted to the urban scenery. The whole word is written in new rhyme, short and concise, and closely aligns with the characteristics of the "spring city of the world" and the "capital of wellness." It is enchanted by the scenery, from the outside and the inside, and gradually unfolds a picture of the city's scenery and the physical and mental well-being. I'll explain and appreciate it sentence by sentence.
Explanation by sentence
"It's lush."
The beginning of the sentence is only four words, and does not write about specific objects, but begins with color and meteorology. The four words are folded in rhymes with long tones, giving the overall impression of a lush and green mood and lush vegetation. This is not only a visual depiction, but also a hint of a warm and vibrant climate.
"It's like a city and a scenery that's hazy."
This sentence points to a core attribute: the melting of the boundaries between the city and the landscape. "Like a city and like a scenery" is an objective judgment. A city contains a scene and a scene contains cities. "Dark also" leaves the scene with a mixture of poetic poetry - it could be morning fog, shadows of flowers, or the dreamlike feeling of being in it. Between seven words, reason and feeling are intertwined.
"The triangle of flowers blooms in spring."
The brush moves from the whole to the specific. The triangle plum is the city flower of Xingyi City, and this sentence speaks of the city flower throughout the spring. The word "smear" is wonderful, as if the spring color did not grow, but had been smeared by creation at random, and there was a vigorous, unrestrained vigor that mirrored the blossoms' flourishing.
"Good luck."
A two-word sentence that is a bright break in the rhythm of the whole word. It is also the color of a triangular plum - red as fire; It also introduces a change of personnel - a metaphor for a lively and prosperous life. Write double meaning in one word, which is simple and powerful.
"Lungs and heart are good for health."
The constraint is from the scenery and people, and from the viewing to the experience. "Lung lubrication" is a natural gift: the air is fresh, the climate is warm, and between breathing is health. "Nurturing the heart" is spiritual healing: beautiful scenery and happiness, physical and mental well-being. "Strong" does not simply mean physical strength, but also a fullness of vitality. The whole word ends up with the experience of "people," which illuminates the whole point of wellness.
Combined appreciation
Although this term is short, it has a complete aesthetic structure and can be understood from three dimensions.
The first is the double evolution of vision and feeling.
The whole word space goes from far and near, from outside to inside, and ends up with body and mind. Begin with a panoramic block of greenery ("lush") and move closer to a mid-scape of cityscapes ("like the city and the scenery"), focus on a beautiful close-up of flowers ("triangle plums"), and finally internalize the breathing of the body and the touch of the mind ("relieve the lungs"). This path completes the integration from "I see the city" to "I am in the city" and "The city becomes me."
Second, use of ink sparingly and precision writing.
"South Country" is a small book, and it's a very bad idea to over-pack. This word is applied entirely in white brushes, without a dictionary or a few words, but the words "wipe" and "fire" make the picture instantly alive. The word "smear" has written elegance, and the word "fire" has double tension. In a very short space of time, a "green - red - healthy" color and emotional leap is formed, and it is easy to display and play.
Third, the literary distillation of urban imagery.
Contemporary urban writing tends to slide toward sloganization and business cardization. The genius of the term lies in holding firmly to the concrete, living image of the triangle plum as the central intermediary, rather than cataloguing labels. Writing about the lushness of spring through the triangle plums, the praise of the city was precipitated as a personal life experience by "relieving the lungs." In this way, city brands have a touchable body temperature.
The whole word is like a written sketch steeped in moisture and sunlight: the trees far away in the mountains are dyed ink, the flowers blossoming in the city, and the moisture between the final breath is the voice outside the picture, the mark the city leaves on the human person.
咏汨罗
韦元龙
汨罗江畔水幽幽，
凉风细雨使人愁。
空有一腔报国志，
何年丹心照九洲？
2023.9.13.17：42于汨罗江畔落蔸图书
(韦元龙，鲁迅文学院学员，北京大学EMBA，未名湖文学社长、主编，燕园书画研究院秘书长。贵州省作家协会、省写作学会、省摄影家协会会员。现为《窗口》文学微刊主编，中国龙网总编辑，民族传媒社长。)
一腔忠魂寄逝水，满腹忧思入江风——评《咏汨罗》
《咏汨罗》是作者亲临汨罗江畔触景生情所作的怀古诗作，全诗语言质朴直白，没有繁复华丽的辞藻雕琢，凭江景起兴，借凭吊屈原抒发个人家国情怀。全诗四句短小凝练，由景入情、怀古抒怀层层递进，我们可从思想内核、艺术手法、当代现实价值三个层面全面赏析解读。
从思想性来看，本诗以汨罗江为情感载体，锚定屈原投江这一经典历史典故，完成了怀古与言志的融合。开篇“汨罗江畔水幽幽，凉风细雨使人愁”，作者伫立江边，悠悠江水连绵不绝，凄风细雨笼罩江面，眼前萧瑟景致勾起内心愁绪。这份愁绪不单单是眼前风雨带来的感官伤感，更是望见江水便想起屈原坎坷一生而生发的惋惜。屈原心怀楚国，心系万民，一生坚守美政理想，却遭奸佞排挤诬陷，报国抱负彻底落空，最终以身殉国，满腔赤诚付诸滔滔江水。后两句“空有一腔报国志，何年丹心照九洲？”将全诗情感推向顶峰，一句反问打破单纯怀古的局限。作者既在悲悯屈原：纵使心怀凌云壮志、一片赤诚忠心，却难以被世道接纳，无法光照山河大地；同时也是自我情志的吐露。古往今来，无数心怀理想、想要为国尽责之人，常会遭遇怀才不遇、壮志难酬的境遇。诗人借千年前屈子的境遇叩问世事，赞颂忠贞爱国的可贵品格，赞美矢志不渝的家国初心，饱含对爱国精神的推崇，思想情感真挚厚重，格局跳出个人观景的小我情绪，落脚于家国忠义，立意端正深厚。融的创作手法运用纯熟。诗歌遵循古典诗词常用的起承转合结构，首句写景，勾勒汨罗江幽静苍茫的环境，以“幽幽”描摹江水绵长沉静之态，奠定低沉感伤的整体基调；第二句承接景色，把景物感受转化为内心情绪，风雨萧瑟直接催生愁绪，景与情浑然一体，过渡自然流畅。前两句以哀景写哀情，为后文抒情做好充分铺垫。后两句由怀古转向抒情，完成全诗情感转折与收束。全诗语言通俗易懂，摒弃晦涩用典，平实流畅，极易引发读者共情。末尾以反问收束全篇，相较于陈述句，反问句式弱化了直白的抱怨，增添悠长余味，将遗憾、感慨、期许交织在一起，余韵绵长。诗作写景具象可感，抒情真切坦诚，不刻意炫技，以真情动人，质朴文风恰恰贴合凭吊先贤肃穆沉静的氛围，简约却不失韵味。
立足当下品读，《咏汨罗》拥有鲜明的现实意义。屈原的爱国精神、坚守本心的气节，是中华民族绵延千年的精神瑰宝，每逢端午，国人凭吊汨罗，便是对忠义爱国文
在艺术性层面，这首七绝章法完整，情景交化的传承。在当下，爱国不再是古时朝堂臣子的个人抱负，而是每一位普通人的责任担当。这首诗作慨叹丹心难显，实则正向世人传递：纯粹的报国之心永远珍贵可贵。它提醒我们，无论身处何种境遇，都应当保有理想与初心，坚守正道、心怀家国。作者亲临江畔有感而发，以现代视角回望历史先贤，拉近了古今的距离，让千年爱国情怀不再是书本上的历史符号，而是可以切身感悟的精神力量。
总而言之，《咏汨罗》篇幅短小，却情真意切。诗作借汨罗江水凭吊屈原，歌颂赤诚爱国之心，兼具饱满的思想内涵、娴熟的写作技巧与深刻的现实价值。江水悠悠奔流不息，屈子忠魂万古长存，这首小诗承载着后人对先贤的敬仰，也寄托着永不褪色的家国情怀，值得细细品读回味。
（全文共计980字）
A loyal soul leaves the water, and a deep sorrow enters the river - a review of the poem "Yung Lu Lu."
"Winging Lu Lu" is a nostalgic poem by the author who visited the riverside of Lu Lu and experienced the scenery. The whole poem language is plain and straightforward, without elaborate words and phrases. It is based on the scenery of the river and expresses his personal feelings of home and country by mourning Qu Yuan. The whole poem is short and concise in four sentences, which progresses from scene to sentiment and ancient poetry, and we can fully appreciate and interpret it from three levels: the core of thought, the artistic technique, and the values of contemporary reality.
（Wei Yuanlong is a student at the Lu Xun Academy of Literature, holds an EMBA degree from Peking University, serves as the president and editor-in-chief of Wenxue Lake Literature Society, and is the secretary-general of Yan Yuan Calligraphy and Painting Research Institute. He is a member of the Guizhou Provincial Writers’ Association, the Provincial Writing Society, and the Provincial Photography Association. Currently, he serves as the editor-in-chief of the literary micro-publication Window, the chief editor of China Dragon Network, and the president of Minzu Media.）
From a conceptual point of view, this poem uses the Ling Luo River as an emotional vector, anchoring the classic historical idiom of Qu Yuan's throwing into the river, completing the integration of ancient nostalgia and speech. The opening sentence is "The water beside the Liyuan River is shallow, and the cool wind and rainy rain make people sad." The author stands by the river. The long river flows continuously, and the bleak wind and rains envelop the river. Before him, the sad scenery stirs up anxiety in his heart. This sadness is not only the sensory sadness brought by the wind and rain before us, but also the regret that when we see the river, we remember Qu Yuan's difficult life. Qu Yuan cherished the State of Chu and cared for the people of China. He stood for the ideal of American governance throughout his life, but he was sidelined and falsely accused by his comrades and cronies, and his ambition to return to China was completely defeated. Finally, he was martyred, and his sincerity was put to the water. The last two sentences: "With a heart full of patriotism, how long has Dan's heart been shining on nine continents?" Pushing the emotion of the whole poem to the top, a question breaking the limits of mere nostalgia for ancient times. The writer is also compassionate: even though he has great ambitions and a sincere loyalty, he cannot be accepted by the world and cannot illuminate the mountains and the earth. It was also a revelation of self-interest. Throughout history, countless people with aspirations and a desire to perform their duties for the country have often encountered situations where their talents were not met and their ambitions were not rewarded. The poet took advantage of the circumstances of Quzi thousands of years ago to question the world, praise the valuable character of loyalty and patriotism, and praise the unwavering original aspiration of his country. He expressed great admiration for the patriotic spirit, and his thoughts and feelings were sincere and heavy, and his pattern went beyond the personal sentiment of his observation of the world, and he focused on the loyalty of his country, and his intention was profoundly correct.
In terms of artistic aspects, the seven chapters are complete, and the scenes are created in a meticulous way. The poem follows the structure of lifting and folding commonly used in classical poetry. The first sentence depicts the scenery of the Lu Luo River, depicting the long and silent state of the river with "swi" and laying down the overall tone of low sadness. The second sentence takes over the scenery and transforms the feeling of the scenery into the inner emotion. The wind and the rain directly cause sadness, the scenery is one with the emotion, and the transition is naturally smooth. The first two sentences write mourning with a sad scene, which makes a good preparation for the later text to express mourning. The latter two sentences shift from Waiku to lyricist, completing the emotional transition and constraint of the whole poem. The language of the whole poem is easy to understand, abandons obscure dictionaries, is plain and flowing, and is very easy to elicit sympathy from the reader. The end of the essay is closed with a question. Compared to a statement, the question weakens the plain complaint and adds a long residue. It mixes regret, sorrow, and hope. The residue is long. The poems write about landscapes that are tangible, expressive and honest, do not attempt to show tricks, and touch people with genuine feelings. The plain style fits the solemn and quiet atmosphere of honoring the sage, but is simple but does not lose its charm.
Based on current reading, "Ying Ling Luo" has a significant practical significance. Qu Yuan's patriotic spirit and a sense of perseverance have been the spiritual treasures of the Chinese nation for thousands of years. Every day of the Dragon Boat Festival, the Chinese people pay tribute to Lu Luo, which is the inheritance of the patriotic culture of loyalty. In the present day, patriotism is no longer the personal ambition of the ancient courtiers, but the responsibility of every ordinary person. The poem lamented that Dan's heart was difficult to reveal, but instead conveyed to the world that a pure heart of giving back to the country was always precious. It reminds us that no matter what circumstances we are in, we should maintain our ideals and original intentions, stay true to the right path, and be devoted to our homeland. The author is inspired by visiting the riverfront and looking back at historical heroes from a modern perspective, bringing the distance between ancient and present times closer, so that the thousand-year patriotic sentiment is no longer a historical symbol in books, but a spiritual force that can be felt in person.
All in all, "Ying Ling Luo" is short but earnest. The poems use the water of the Lu Luo River to pay tribute to Qu Yuan and celebrate the sincere patriotism, which combines full thought content, skilled writing skills and profound practical value. The river flows continuously, and Qu Zi's loyal soul endures throughout the ages. This small poem carries the reverence of future generations for the wise men and the nostalgia for the homeland that will never fade. It is worth reading and reliving.
(The full text is 980 words)
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For a notice of lost documents, a company cancellation notice, a court notice, find the International Business Journal for publication.
The China Business and Industry Times, the Guizhou National News!
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